I"m BACK!!!!

Sep 10, 2004 7 Replies

Hi guys, have missed you dearly, often spoken though. Ok now bk to my heart of hearts the love of making jewelry. I started working on my website and of course as usual Sooz directed me bk to you all for insite and critisum. SO help me out, and take a peep, pls keep in mind that i'm not anyway near done yet.

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Love you all Melx2


Oh honey get a spell checker. I can't get past the typos.

May I gently suggest that you paste your text into to Word or similar program for correct grammar and spelling?

eesh. My grammar isn't so hot either but then again I'm not posting to my website.

Glad to have you back!!

Good that you're getting a site put together.

I would suggest a softer look to the graphics. They and the frame around picture, overwhelm the picture of your bracelet. The picture is also small.

The first page has some spelling and grammar errors. The second time you spell your name Designs with Purpose, you have 2 spelling errors. Also the question mark at the end of the paragraph isn't appropriate. I'd suggest writing, "You'll never have to worry if it's the right size", instead of YOU'LL NEVER HAVE TO WORRY IS IT THE RIGHT SIZE?

In the second paragraph: people spelled wrong; designed spelled wrong, style spelled wrong, pictures spelled wrong. "High end beads"? Does that mean you use $40 focal beads and emerald (gem) beads, or simply good quality beads. I think you mean "quality beads" not "high end beads".

On the OUR PRODUCTS page. Designs (in your name) is spelled incorrectly. Do you have a "line" of jewelry? That kind of implies that you always will have available similar sets of jewelry. I simply offer what I have. A "line of jewelry" would keep me stuck in a style. There is Fine Silver and Sterling Silver, and they are two different things. There is not "Fine Sterling Silver". I WILL PERSONALLY WORK WITH EACH CUSTOMER TO CREATE THERE SPECIAL PIECE. Not "there" (as in that place), but "their" (as in belonging to them).

You will need to have bigger pictures or else have a link to a bigger picture. They are so much smaller than the graphics, it makes them look unimportant. And of course, the customer can't see the piece well enough to make a decision whether to buy.

But it's a good start.

Tina

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